THE TEN DOCTORS
PART ONE
The Doctor swung around the console. The central column pulsed, the emerald lights reflecting on the doctor’s face. “Aha” he said with a bright grin. “Shallakatop”! The doctor’s hand reached to turn some switches. The Tardis shook violently and he fell backwards. “What!” he roared as he climbed up the console, twisting the monitor. “We are being taken off course”. The Tardis began to de-materialise.
The Doctor stepped out into a misty landscape. He could see nothing but grey. “Hello”. The doctor spun to see the source of the voice behind him. A man the doctor was only to familiar with was dressed in a long, brown coat. “No, you shouldn’t be here. What’s going on”? The man stepped forward brushing his curly, brown hair out of his eyes and giving a bright grin. “I am the doctor”.
The Doctor stepped out into a misty landscape. He could see nothing but grey. “Hello”. The doctor spun to see the source of the voice behind him. A man the doctor was only to familiar with was dressed in a long, brown coat. “No, you shouldn’t be here. What’s going on”? The man stepped forward brushing his curly, brown hair out of his eyes and giving a bright grin. “I am the doctor”.
“You shouldn’t be here. And where is here”? “This is Barcelina, the twin planet of Barcelona. And why shouldn’t I be here”? The doctor opened his mouth to explain when, out of the shadows, a shorter figure stepped. “Oh know, not you”. The second character took off his hat to greet the doctors. “I’m the doctor, and you are…” As he did he recognised one of them. “You, oh no, this can’t be”.
“Hold on, hold on. Before you say anything we need to sort this out” the doctor said abruptly as he pulled out his specs. The doctor pointed at the shorter of the two. “You should recognise him” the doctor claimed as he swung his finger at the doctor with the curly hair. “Yes, I’m the doctor” the shorter agreed with a confused face. 
“He is me aswell and who are you and why do you know me”. The curly haired doctor turned and accusingly asked “How do you know me? I don’t know you, I am the doctor”. The doctor butted in “Stop, I am the doctor, we all are”.
“So you mean we are all the same doctor?” the curly doctor asked. “Yup” the doctor replied. “Same man. There are ten of us now and I’m the latest”. “And I am the seventh” the shorter of the two added. “Then you must know that I am the fourth” the fourth doctor said. “And I am the third”. There was another man behind them dressed in a red velvet jacket and long, black trousers reaching down to a pair of shiny black shoes. “I have lost my friend”. “Ah yes, so have I” the fourth doctor said. “As have I” the seventh doctor added.
“He is me aswell and who are you and why do you know me”. The curly haired doctor turned and accusingly asked “How do you know me? I don’t know you, I am the doctor”. The doctor butted in “Stop, I am the doctor, we all are”.“So you mean we are all the same doctor?” the curly doctor asked. “Yup” the doctor replied. “Same man. There are ten of us now and I’m the latest”. “And I am the seventh” the shorter of the two added. “Then you must know that I am the fourth” the fourth doctor said. “And I am the third”. There was another man behind them dressed in a red velvet jacket and long, black trousers reaching down to a pair of shiny black shoes. “I have lost my friend”. “Ah yes, so have I” the fourth doctor said. “As have I” the seventh doctor added.
1 comment:
You need to do some proofreading and editing very badly if you expect this to be readable, particularly if it is going to be of any significant length. Even with your pictures, it's quite difficult to keep track of who is speaking to whom.
You also need to look carefully at your time line. At the very beginning, the TARDIS *de*materialises, and then the Doctor steps out- but it, according to the narration, had not yet *re*materialised, for example.
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